COuld you review some of this book for me and tell me your honest opinion. I wrote it and I feel there is something wrong with it. Please be honest and give tips!! Thank you so much for this huge favor!!!❤
Here it is.....(sorry about the typos.)

“Benjamin,hop in the pool. It’s too hot to be just sitting here. I made some fresh lemonade.” says Jazylin, our maid.
I hate days like this. You know those days where there is nothing to do. It’s too hot and boring.

“Attack!” yells Belle, my 4 year old sister.

“Whoa,there Captain Belle! Hold your fire.” say Jazylin.

“Only if he surrenders.”

“Surrender from what?”I ask

“Breathing my air”

“Wow,are you serious?”

“Yes.”

“Ok, I’ll let you blow out one of my birthday candles instead.”

“Deal. Bye measly peasant.” She says as she floats in the pool on her flamingo floatie.

“Jazzy,what element do you think I will get?”
I can’t help wondering. This is the 14th time I’ve asked. My family comes from a long line of masters--people with a power to control one element. My mum is an earthmaster. My father is an airmaster. My parents hate firemasters and plasma masters. A firemaster once killed my grandpa. However, the elements aren’t decided by genes. They are decided by your personality. Earth is stubborn, Water is calm and passionate, Air is free and fun, Fire is wild. I know, what about plasma? Well, I'm not going to get plasma. Plasma is the only one affected by genes, and always is different. You can only get plasma if you have two parents that are fire and water;have two parents that are plasma; or are a twin and your original elements are fire and water. Very complicated. I won't get too far into that.

“Benjamin, don’t worry about it.”

“But,you know! Please tell me, Jazzy! YOu know me better than my parents.”

“I do have a guess but you will see, so don't worry about it.”

“Ok, Jazzy.” I say with a sigh

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Answer 1

Answer:

I think its pretty good.

Explanation:

Answer 2

Answer and Explanation:

Here is my take on this portion of the book:

- The birthday part - I'm a bit confused why this comes up, when the scene is by the pool on a hot day. Maybe the sister has always wanted to blow out his candles (or maybe always does), and so (being the child she is) she makes a deal to blow out his candle on his b-day (whenever that day comes) in exchange for breathing air.

- The conversation with the little sister is good, showing the mental age the sister is and ( i think) the maturity of the older brother.

- The transition into the long explanation paragraph is it a bit rough, so maybe add another interaction/sentence before jumping into the elements. Also, the paragraph seems a bit much. Some parts seem chopped up and divided, like the parents hating fire masters and plasma masters. You could combine this sentence w/ the reasoning for them hating those masters.

If the story is having the narrator talk to the audience (or to a diary, recalling their accounts of the day with the mix of in present talking), you can say, "I can't stop thinking about this question. This is the 14th time I've asked today. You see, my family comes from a long line of elemental masters.... (Talks about the elements, but make sure to combine some of the sentences so it doesn't feel choppy. It only felt slightly choppy when I read it).

- Overall, some improvements need to be made but I would definitely read this when it is finished, sounds intriguing with a plot waiting for you to dive in and experience it with the character.

#teamtrees #PAW (Plant And Water)

I hope this helps!


Related Questions

how do you define contemporary? how us it different from the tradition or modern?​

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Answer:

According to the Merriam-Webster Dictionary, the word “modern” is defined as, “of or relating to the present time.”  The word “contemporary” is defined as “happening or beginning now or in recent times.” While these definitions may appear to be similar or even nearly identical, in terms of art genres, they are very incongruent.

Explanation: hope this helps :)

What was a “Pilgrimage Road?”

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road across northern Spain to Santiago de Compostela in the NW was one of the three major Christian pilgrimage routes leading pilgrims to the resting place of the Apostle St. James.

Answer:

The Pilgrimage Road was a route taken by Christian pilgrims to get to the burial site of St. James.

Explanation:

Define the word “Musical Jingle"

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Answer:

jingle is a short song or tune used in advertising and for other commercial uses. Jingles are a form of sound branding. ...

The Romantic Movement brought new attention to capturing strong emotions, among them negative emotions like _____________________.
A. loneliness and sadness
B. happiness and sadness
C. terror and horror
D. anger and terror

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Explanation:

loneliness and sadnesd

The answer is A: loneliness and sadness.



शायद कभी ना कह सकूँ मैं तुमको
कहे बिना समझ लो तुम शायद
शायद मेरे ख्याल में तुम एक दिन
मिलो मुझे कहीं पे गुम शायद
जो तुम ना हो रहेंगे हम नहीं
जो तुम ना हो रहेंगे हम नहीं
ना चाहिए कुछ तुमसे ज्यादा
तुमसे कम नहीं

जो तुम ना हो तो हम भी हम नहीं
जो तुम ना हो तो हम भी हम नहीं
ना चाहिए कुछ तुमसे ज्यादा
तुमसे कम नहीं

आँखों को ख्वाब देना
खुद ही सवाल करके
हिन्दी ट्रैक्स डॉट इन
खुद ही जवाब देना तेरी तरफ से
बिन काम काम करना जाना कहीं हो चाहे
हर बार ही गुज़रना तेरी तरफ से

ये कोशिशें तो होंगी कम नहीं
ये कोशिशें तो होंगी कम नहीं
ना चाहिए कुछ तुमसे ज्यादा, तुमसे कम नहीं

जो तुम ना हो रहेंगे हम नहीं
जो तुम ना हो तो हम भी हम नहीं
ना चाहिए कुछ तुमसे ज्यादा, तुमसे कम नहीं

जो तुम ना हो…




I may never be able to express my heart to you.
So please understand without me saying it
Maybe one day in my memories
You’ll come and meet me somewhere

I won’t be able to live without you
I won’t be able to live without you
I don’t want anything more than you,
Neither less than you
I’m not myself without you
I’m not myself without you
I don’t want anything more than you,
Neither less than you

Give my eyes dreams by asking a question
And you yourself give the answer from your side
I do useless things and if
I have to go somewhere
Then I always pass from your side
These attempts won’t reduce
These attempts won’t reduce

I don’t want anything more than you,
Neither less than you
I won’t be able to live without you
I’m not myself without you
I don’t want anything more than you,
Neither less than you
Without you

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Absolutely Beautiful!!

Answer:

Woah Very good

Absolutely Fabolous


Careful attention to the music during this time is not as important as letting the music wash over you, allowing you to respond to it emotionally. True or False

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Answer:

False

Explanation:

Because listening to the music carefully is important and responding to it emotionally is also important.

Answer:

I would say False

Explanation:

BRAINLIEST + 5 STARS
COuld you review some of this book for me and tell me your honest opinion. I wrote it and I feel there is something wrong with it. Please be honest and give tips!! Thank you so much for this huge favor!!!❤

Here it is.....(sorry about the typos.)


“Benjamin,hop in the pool. It’s too hot to be just sitting here. I made some fresh lemonade.” says Jazylin, our maid.

I hate days like this. You know those days where there is nothing to do. It’s too hot and boring.


“Attack!” yells Belle, my 4 year old sister.


“Whoa,there Captain Belle! Hold your fire.” say Jazylin.


“Only if he surrenders.”


“Surrender from what?”I ask


“Breathing my air”


“Wow,are you serious?”


“Yes.”


“Ok, I’ll let you blow out one of my birthday candles instead.”


“Deal. Bye measly peasant.” She says as she floats in the pool on her flamingo floatie.


“Jazzy,what element do you think I will get?”

I can’t help wondering. This is the 14th time I’ve asked. My family comes from a long line of masters--people with a power to control one element. My mum is an earthmaster. My father is an airmaster. My parents hate firemasters and plasma masters. A firemaster once killed my grandpa. However, the elements aren’t decided by genes. They are decided by your personality. Earth is stubborn, Water is calm and passionate, Air is free and fun, Fire is wild. I know, what about plasma? Well, I'm not going to get plasma. Plasma is the only one affected by genes, and always is different. You can only get plasma if you have two parents that are fire and water;have two parents that are plasma; or are a twin and your original elements are fire and water. Very complicated. I won't get too far into that.


“Benjamin, don’t worry about it.”


“But,you know! Please tell me, Jazzy! YOu know me better than my parents.”


“I do have a guess but you will see, so don't worry about it.”


“Ok, Jazzy.” I say with a sigh

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Answer:

It has a good start, but you should add more context to what you are writing. It is hard to follow what is happening. Otherwise, the story is set up very well.

Answer: I think it's great, I write a lot of novels on my free time.  

It depends on the type of story you're writing, think of the genre, and if it's for personal reading, try to understand the motives of the story, or if you're sharing it try to understand the audience reading the piece. make sure to choose words wisely and carefully as well, after writing look at your word choices and see if they satisfy you or try to change them to more appealing words. what are your goals? think about how you want this to grasp people's attention.

Think about what inspires you to write the piece. dont forget to take your time when writing. when writing try to pay attention to detail and to help get ideas read a bit about the genre you're writing about.

if you ever have questions im available.

What is the subject of Anne Schwegmann-Fielding's sculpture?
A: apple
B: bird
C:squirrel
D: tree

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Bird cuz it’s more ironic (hope this helps)

The subject of Anne Schwegmann-Fielding's sculpture is a bird. Option B is the correct answer.

Sculpture is a three-dimensional artwork created by carving, modeling, or casting various materials. It can be made from materials such as clay, stone, metal, wood, or glass. Sculptures are designed to be viewed from different angles and perspectives, adding depth and dimension to the artwork. Option B is the correct answer.

Schwegmann-Fielding was known for her artwork in mosaic, collage, and sculpture. Her work was distinctive due to its vibrant use of color, varied textures, intricate patterns, and captivating imagery. Additionally, her pieces often incorporated a touch of humor. She drew inspiration from a wide range of sources, spanning across different continents and encompassing both aerial and terrestrial themes.

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Need help Pleaseeeeee

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Answer:

proportion

Explanation:

proportion design principle

What do you notice about the placement of the trees in each painting

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Answer:

cant see image

Explanation:

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Write only the letter of your answer

D. Art Nouveau
A. Futurism
C. Expressionism
B. Cubism

1. Inspired by both organic and geometric forms.

2. Celebrated the machine age.

3. Focusing on the vitality of the modern world.

4. Exaggerated and distorted representations

5. Abandoned perspective, foreshortening and chiaroscuro

6. Illustrated totally fragmented objects presented in many angles

7. Employed bold and intense colors and strong outlines

8. Preferred sophisticated designs that united angular and flowing forms.

9. Incorporated primitivism and fantasy

10. No interest in copying color, texture, form and space.​

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Answer:

B the answer is B

Explanation:

I've answered it

https://youtu.be/yxTTvC25R40 Please check out my new remix, I'm a 14 year old producer who needs to get some clout so he can get a better producing software.

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Yes very good music Frfr

Visual hierarchy definition

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The defienition would be something like.

I have a cat, my cat has babies, the cat picks up her kittens and takes them away from places. It's like assorting dominance, dogs pee on hydrants to mark there terrioty. Thats am example.

Another Example below:

Cats fight each other to show who can get the girl, or just show it to say, "HEY THIS IS MY TERRITORY!"

Brainliest please.

Answer:

Visual hierarchy, according to Gestalt psychology, is a pattern in the visual field wherein some elements tend to "stand out," or attract attention, more strongly than other elements, suggesting a hierarchy of importance.

Visual hierarchy is important in design because it defines the importance and sequence of elements within a composition. It influences the order in which your audience views your content. Order can significantly impact comprehension, impact, and value.

Explanation:

If you look at the picture below, it uses size to attract your eye. The sizing of it also helps give you an idea of the distance or dimensions of the objects within the image

You are traveling up an on ramp when you realize it is the wrong one. You should immediately: stop and back down the ramp pull to the side and turn on your hazards perform a turnabout on the onramp continue and get off at the next exit

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Answer:

continue and get off at the next exit.

Answer:

Yeah continue on and get off at the next exit. I think it would be risky to try to back out and turn around at the time.

Explanation:

Can someone tell me what these are

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Answer:

The answer to question 8 is D ninth.

Explanation:

Sorry I don't know the answer to the other question

I need help for drawing something related to changed, (A came where you become furry). All I have is my pfp. So if anyone knows about changed and knows how to draw, please answer this.

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Answer:

HI

Explanation:

IF I GIVE YOU APICTURE THEN YOU CAN DRAW AS LIKE PICTURE?

LET ME KNOW  IN INBOX OKAY

INBOX ME

Answer:

I can help! I've drawn plenty of art for that in the past. Although it's unclear what you want specifically, so here's a quick doodle for you. Let me know if you've got something specific in mind. ^^'

Art:

What are the colors of the rainbow in order?


free pts, you can look at my other question that also says "free pts" :)

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RED ORANGE YELLOW GREEN BLOOOO INDIGO VIOLET

Answer:

Red, Orange, Yellow, Green, Blue, Indigo, Violet

R.O.Y.G.B.I.V

Explanation:

What does Theramin sound like and where have you heard this sound before?

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Swooping sound I guess

This work of art is attributed to Charles Moore. How did his work incorporate influences from previous art periods?

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Answer:

Charles Moore's Piazza de'Italia is categorized under Post Modernism.

Explanation:

This building is cultural commemoration towards Italian migrants by the American-Italian community. Overshadowed by French and Spanish culture, this building was gathering point for them.

Postmodernism encapsulated many other art movements like Abstract Expressionism, Performance art, video art and other interactive new media art forms.

The two of Postmodernism are 1. Interior Scroll, a performance by Carolee Schneeman and 2. Free Ride, a sculptural installation by Tony Smith.

Postmodernism addresses a freedom from the existing modern art movements. they negate all the evolution and bring to the culture a newer set of forms, imageries and mediums.

Charles Moore art work is classifies as postmodernism which is doing art in a modern way.

What is the influence of Charles Moore work?

Postmodernism was the influence of his work where he made use of new ideas and perspective different from the cultural way of doing art work.

This movement led to other movement such as expressionism.

Therefore, Charles Moore art work is classifies as postmodernism which is doing art in a modern way.

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please answer this picture question

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Answer:

i don't the answer

Explanation:

What’s the best music genre in your opinion

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Answer:

soul/r&b/blues/50s rock

How is the music of southeast Asian country relating to its geography and culture?​

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Answer:

hat dogggggggggggggggg

Me and my sister having a disagreement about what color we should paint our room how can I use that into 4 paragraphs please help

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Answer:

Create details and make up stuff that "happened"

Explanation:

If you need help, ill write it for you.

Question 3
1 pts
Miguel wants to take an art course at a local community center. He loves dancing and
creating music. He has recently expressed a desire to learn more about acting. What
course would you recommend to Miguel?
visual arts
O decorative arts
O performing arts
O written art

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Answer:

performing arts because he enjoys dancing and creating music.

The course which would recommend to Miguel is performing arts Option(b) is correct.

What does performing arts means?

The performing arts will be arts like music, dance, and show which are performed for a crowd of people.

They are not the same as the visual arts, which are the utilization of paint, material or different materials to make physical or static workmanship objects. Theater, music, dance, object control, and different sorts of exhibitions are available in all human societies.

The historical backdrop of music and dance date to pre-noteworthy times though bazaar abilities date to basically Ancient Egypt. Many performing arts are performed expertly. Execution can be in carefully designed structures, for example, theaters and drama houses, on outdoors arranges at celebrations, on stages in tents, for example, bazaars or in the city.

Live exhibitions before a group of people are a type of diversion. The advancement of sound and video recording has considered private utilization of the performing arts. The performing arts frequently plans to communicate one's feelings and sentiments.

Therefore Option(b) is correct.

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Look at the three vacation photographs above. Select one of the photographs to answer the following questions in complete sentences:


Write a description of the photograph to someone who cannot see the photograph. Be sure to include the title of the photograph and photographer credit in your response.

Which of the following elements of art and photographic techniques did the photographer use in the photograph you selected?

Line

Color

Texture

Shape

Rule of thirds

What do you think is the story in the photograph?

Do you think the photographer was successful with this photograph? What would you change to improve the photograph? Be specific to help you take better pictures as well.

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Answer:

pictures would be useful

Explanation:

pictures?

1.4 Describe how the following concepts could help to fight social challenges:
social activism and social justice

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Answer: 1: Examine your beliefs and habits.

2: Educate yourself about social justice issues.

3: Discover your local organizations.

4: Take positive action in your own community.

5: Harness the power of social media.

6: Attend demonstrations and protests

7: Volunteer.

8: Donate.

why is art fun?
why do i enjoy it????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????

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Answer:

it all depends on your interest in the subject

art is fun for you because you like to do it.

you have talent or you worked hard for it

but it's not same for everyone

it depends on how you feel about that subject, if you enjoy drawing, paint, coloring ect. then you would like if

What is a plot point pls answer extra points to the brainlest

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Answer:

a

Explanation:

Answer:

Plot points are major events in a story that change the course of the plot as a whole.

Explanation:

A plot point is basically a point in each different event in a story; Beginning, Middle, (Next), End.

I actually am so terrible.

Why Mona Lisa painting famous?

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MONA LISA PAINTING IS FAMOUS BECAUSE IT WAS DRAWN BACK IN LATE FRANCE BETWEEN 1503 TO 1519 . MONA LISA PAINTING IS FAMOUS FOR ITS UNIQUE SMILE WHICH CREATE OPTICAL ILLUSION TO VIEWER. AT WHEREEVER DIRECTION OF PAINTING IF YOU LOOK AT HER EYE IT FEEL LIKE SHE IS WATCHING YOU.MONA LISA IS ALSO considered AS ON OF MOST EXPENSIVE PAINTING IN THE WORLD.HOPE THIS INFORMATION WAS HELPFULL TO YOU

Answer:

Unlike other sixteenth-century paintings, the Mona Lisa is a wonderfully realistic depiction of a very genuine human figure. It was the result of a series of misfortunes, as well as the painting's inherent appeal.

there were many other factors that made the mona lisa different from other art pieces at the time like:

Unique Art techniques

the Mona Lisa used sfumato (the technique of allowing tones and colours to shade gradually into one another, producing softened outlines or hazy forms.) which was done extremely rarely at the timeThe face of the woman in the portrait has an enigmatic expression. Her lovely grin, which is both aloof and enticing, alters Because of variances in spatial frequency perception within the human eye, she appears cheery from one perspective and unhappy from another. thanks to Leonardo’s mastery of lighting and shadows, It was created to give the appearance that a subject's eyes are following people around the room. The effect has become known incorrectly as "the mona lisa effect".

Mona Lisa's origins

The Mona Lisa was painted over the course of several years by Leonardo da Vinci, the Florentine polymath and artist who created some of the Renaissance's most iconic works. although there is little information about his childhood, scholars do know that as a young man he was apprenticed to an artist and sculptor named Andrea di Cione del Verrocchio. He created many sophisticated pieces of art over the course of his career, and in the early 1500s, began work on what would come to be known as the Mona Lisa.It is generally believed that the Mona Lisa is a painting of Francesco del Giocondo's wife, Lisa Gherardini. Speculation abounds that the mysterious woman in the image could be any one of a dozen Italian noblewomen. There is even a popular theory that it is a feminized version of Leonardo himself.However, a note written in 1503 by Agostino Vespucci, an Italian clerk who was assistant to Niccolò Machiavelli, indicates that Leonardo told Vespucci he was indeed working on a painting of del Giocondo's wife.

Grand theft painting

For centuries, the Mona Lisa hung quietly in the Louvre, generally unnoticed, but on August 21, 1911, it was stolen right off the museum's wall in a heist that rocked the art world. Vincenzo Peruggia, an Italian carpenter, stole the painting and hid it under his workman's tunic. Since the 1913 theft, the Mona Lisa has been the target of other activities.  The French police blamed the Louvre for lax security, while the Louvre publicly ridiculed law enforcement officials for failing to turn up any leads.

artist from the late 20th century and analyze one of the artist's artworks in terms of social or cultural commentary.

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Answer:

The first artist from the late 20th is Picasso.

Explanation:

Is the first artist from the late 20th

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